PEER REVIEW

Park sang geun

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
3points. His idea is clear. However paragraphs are too short to support his arguments well. And he didn't follow classical argument well.
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How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
I think he could improve his last supporting and conclusion. More examples and statistics will be good.
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Thesis
What is the thesis?
Every professional sports club should have the sports psychology experts.
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Is the thesis clear and debatable?
Yes, it is.
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If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
As he wrote.
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Any other thoughts?
no other thoughts.
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Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
I think narration and refutation are missing.
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Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
Yes, it does.
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Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
No
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Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes
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Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
No
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Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
Partially. But it does not address the larger significance of the thieis well.
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What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
He should follow the classical argument format.
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Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
Agree
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When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
Agree
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If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
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How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
More statistics to add credibility
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Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
No
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Is the research from appropriate sources?
No
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Are the sources obvious?
No
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Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
No
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Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
No
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